who am I ?
Catalina Millaray Palma Vera was born on may 24,1991 in santigo , chile . She is only child of the marriage of Francisco Javier Palma with Nelly vera Lòpez .She was baptized in the Catholic religion with name Catalina da Siena Palma Vera in church of the semi-rural commune Calera de Tango , place where she lives until today .Her mother very religious, enrolled her in a conservative catholic school, but after his saparation and several insults directed at Catalina by her classmates , she transfers to a experimental school and high school ,Master College, located in San Bernardo, Catalina completed her studies there, at age 18 with awards .
Catalina since child, was surrounded by nannies, her parents with little time for her, constantly left her with her nannies or her great-grandmother, following her growth and death of her great-grandmother at the age of 9, her mother began to search hobbies, to see that to Catalina liked to watch her cousins and the practices of them ,they were music students, enrolled her in music classes of the same master of his cousins and introduced her to politics. At 14 age, Catalina leaves her Flute classes to study classical singing and oil painting. After finishing high school Catalina is enroll in the visual arts career at the University of Chile, begins to take place within the political party that belonging to ,must cease to be the head string of voice of the mezzo soprano, but still she practices classical singing as a hobby , like the lessons of flute.
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The flute's sound is beatiful. A song named "Elegy" performed by Jethro Tull is one of the prettiest song I ever heard.
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